OT: My Music Up

[MoGrAdY]

http://www.myspace.com/modasilverback



Everyone please check it out. Hate it. Love it. I dont really care, jus gimme the time of day. If you got a Myspace account please add me and leave me a comment. Any and all criticism is welcome. I would like to point out i know the sound quality isnt amazing. I havent been able to save up for da mic or mixer i want yet so Im using a mic built into a cam we have. Da only way to get anywhere with da Myspace scene is listens though so Im countin on you guys to help me out. Thanks guys an I hope you enjoy.

[CourtsideTV]

Boss > souljah boy..

therefore you > souljah boy..

that is all i can say.

way to rep 'dwight' by pronouncing yourself the 'beast'

[MoGrAdY]

Haha gotta do it for Dwight man..


BTW anyone who likes it please pass on the link to yah homies. Even if you dont like it pretend you do and pass it on so they listen

[Devin 1L]

http://www.myspace.com/modasilverback



Everyone please check it out. Hate it. Love it. I dont really care, jus gimme the time of day. If you got a Myspace account please add me and leave me a comment. Any and all criticism is welcome. I would like to point out i know the sound quality isnt amazing. I havent been able to save up for da mic or mixer i want yet so Im using a mic built into a cam we have. Da only way to get anywhere with da Myspace scene is listens though so Im countin on you guys to help me out. Thanks guys an I hope you enjoy.

"I love da hataz":


Mo, to be honest, I didn't really like it.

It felt forced.

Some of the similes seemed to be there only because they rhymed, rather than they were lyrical substance which also rhymed.

Secondly, and this ties in with the previous statement, I felt like there was some dissonance with the lyrics and the music. I don't know how the song was assembled, but it "feels" as if you had lyrics with no music and then created the music and forced the lyrics on top of it. It give a sort of freestyle sound to it. You can get by with it freestyling, but with a produced song I don't think you should have this dissonance with awkward stops, chopping, catching your breath, etc. to try and make it fit with the beat.

Also, and I know it's the nature of rap, but I don't feel like much of you were saying was "real". For example, "I got a couple whips that I never drive/I got a couple clips and I let 'em fly." This is more of a personal preference, but if I'm going to listen to something and/or buy it, it either got to blow me away with production and "catchiness" (think Soulja Boy - "Crank Dat") or have some raw and real lyrics that I buy into (think, maybe, Immortal Technique). Unfortunately, this is augmented by the fact that you're white. So you'll probably be perceived as some middle class white kid with no street-cred rappin' about women, whips and guns, etc.

Damn, I feel like I'm doggin' you, and that isn't my intent, but I didn't like the hook either. It got repetitive quick, and sounded odd with a dude saying it. Perhaps if you had a girl doing background with the "l-la-love..." I'm thinking along the lines of Stagga Lee's "Roll Wit MVP" (another white rapper, by the way).

Also, that background "whistle" sounded eerily similar to Biggie's "Big Pappa". I don't know if it was intentional or not, but it's the first thing I noticed.

Ultimately, I'd say this gives anyone who'd be hating on you more fuel. I'd suggest stick to yourself and make it raw and personal, rather than what felt like a dubbed down version of pop-rap. I'm sure you've got a story to tell. Be real; tell it. As a young white middle class rapper, it's going to be hard as hell for you, (as if it isn't hard enough for anyone to be a rapper ), so tell you're story. I think you'd be best received as a real, raw, lyricist spitting on issues that have affected and molded you. Further, that's probably when your best lyrics and song will surface.

Of course, this is all a matter of opinion, my opinion, but I thought I'd take the time to listen and tell you what I truly thought. If it comes off as harsh, I apologize; but if I didn't give a damn, I wouldn't have took the time and wrote all of that.

[SOUL]

yeah your sound quality isnt that great but you said that once you get it it'll be str8

lyrics arent bad.. flow is cool but you sound a little unconfortable at times..gets a little repetitive, which isn't bad but you dont sound too hype at all.. so once you got that down it'll be good. not bad

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=4075485

^i used to rap (click "play hi-fi".. lol.. like 2 years ago havent wrote in a while.. im the 2nd dude

[MoGrAdY]

You know Soul I feel you 100% about the i dont sound hyped part.. An the turh is I cant lol.. When I try to spit wit a lil more hype da sound gets worse cus da mic pics up some "Boom" effect type stuff lol..


And Devin, I love you man (No homo) haha. Everyone has they own preferences. I jus love the fact that you are bein real with me. An actually the I love da hataz thing is mostly all freestyle haha, the beat I picked up from a random site. Id never heard it before. An the line you mentioned about da clips was actually going to be edited out cus obviously dats not me, but I jus wanted to git my stuff up. Ill work on sumpin "Real" for you dis week an Ill let you know when i got it done an see whatchu think. Again I appreciate all da advice and honesty man.

[Cammo101]

yeah your sound quality isnt that great but you said that once you get it it'll be str8

lyrics arent bad.. flow is cool but you sound a little unconfortable at times..gets a little repetitive, which isn't bad but you dont sound too hype at all.. so once you got that down it'll be good. not bad

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=4075485

^i used to rap (click "play hi-fi".. lol.. like 2 years ago havent wrote in a while.. im the 2nd dude

I dug the song a lot Soul. Very nice.

[SOUL]

You know Soul I feel you 100% about the i dont sound hyped part.. An the turh is I cant lol.. When I try to spit wit a lil more hype da sound gets worse cus da mic pics up some "Boom" effect type stuff lol..

no doubt.. my old old mic was like that.. it sucked.. try putting a sock or cloth over it if you can and stand back.. my old mic was like 10 bucks cheap one and i had that trouble at first but i got to be more hype without it making the popping noise.. or just borrow a good mic from a friend (which is what I did )

and thank you cammo.. i kinda hate my stuff after i make it for some reason.. but it really wasn't bad for it being pretty long ago .. wish i still wrote but oh well.. was just a hobby

[MoGrAdY]

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no doubt.. my old old mic was like that.. it sucked.. try putting a sock or cloth over it if you can and stand back.. my old mic was like 10 bucks cheap one and i had that trouble at first but i got to be more hype without it making the popping noise

and thanks cammo.. i kinda hate my stuff after i make it for some reason.. but it wasnt bad for being so long ago.. wish i still wrote but oh well.

Yea I got a pillow cover over da mic now, but still actin a fool when I try to hype it up.. I got a good mic on order so it wont be long.. An I listened to dat track of your like 10 times now haha, love it man.. Why you stop?

[FFBlitzace]

I don't know what I'm talking about, so I won't really make any comments. Better than I could do, I know that.


You should record some of my Disney songs

[MoGrAdY]

You needa drop some of dat Disney Magic on one of my tracks Blitz.. I know dat would go platinum.

[SOUL]

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Yea I got a pillow cover over da mic now, but still actin a fool when I try to hype it up.. I got a good mic on order so it wont be long.. An I listened to dat track of your like 10 times now haha, love it man.. Why you stop?

ahh.. yeah.. id just wait then.. or just practice ur songs on this mic and then re-record it once you get the better one.. also what program do you use to record with?

thanks man.. i honestly have no idea.. i havent wrote seriously for like a year.. ive been writing since 2002 so maybe i just got burnt out.. even though it was all for fun , but yeah i mostly recorded with my boy in the song.. but i moved back to NY a couple months ago so it'll be hard to record .. only when i go back down.. but yeah.. i think the urge to write/record will come back soon

btw sorry for kinda hijacking the thread just thought id share one more:

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=3355589

^^that one everybody seemed to like the most for some reason.. i kinda hate that i actually got TOO hype.. the first dude had like 10 times better quality and his delivery was really good so i couldnt be all quiet

but yeah if ya need any questions answered ill try to help ya

[SOUL]

I don't know what I'm talking about, so I won't really make any comments. Better than I could do, I know that.


You should record some of my Disney songs

You can be a ghostwriter, write some future Magic themed hits

[MoGrAdY]

Yo Soul you didnt hijack dis man, we need a music thread anyway.. besides I love yah music man, you needa git back on it man..

[CPBalla2003 n da 863]

Mo, i didnt know that was u sending me the request, ill check it out and drop some lines of wat i think homey

[MoGrAdY]

Appreciate it balla

[MoGrAdY]

Ay Soul I jus put a new song up, tried to hype it up a lil without soundin bad.. Lemme know whatchu think.. An Devin da 2nd verse is for you, its a lil bout my life when I was young.. Song called Get from round me..

[aleZ]

I must say you had more style and attitude with the 'fro, you could go with the braids instead of going bald

Jokes aside, I liked what you've done so far, I listen to a lot of rap music from Tupac to Cham, and you're pretty good at this. I can see a very bright future in the music business if you make/have the right connections, the flow is there, the rhymes too, and we all know you got the character Just keep it up.

[MoGrAdY]

Appreciate da feed back man.. An thanks alot my dude..

[SOUL]

Ay Soul I jus put a new song up, tried to hype it up a lil without soundin bad.. Lemme know whatchu think.. An Devin da 2nd verse is for you, its a lil bout my life when I was young.. Song called Get from round me..

cool. just checked it.. yep man you got a lil more hyped.. feelin it more than your other tracks.. once you get that new mic i bet youll feel more comfortable.. lyrics were nice, got pretty personal/in depth.. I liked it man.. if I were you I'd try to put some adlibs (if you know how to mix) in to spice up your tracks/add extra emphasis.. its good for choruses and the end of your bars and stuff.. but yeah just keep practicing your verses and keep writing.. you'll be spittin fire in no time..