My understanding must be poor...

Speedlot · Post #1 » by **Speedlot** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:00 pm

What the heck does this mean?

Lee did not deny his agent Mark Bartlestein before the draft advised Memphis not to trade for him because Lee would never sign a long-term contract with the Grizzlies.

-_-

Someone put commas in so I understand. I need to go back to college. Ugh

Magilla_Gorilla · Post #2 » by **Magilla_Gorilla** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:04 pm

Speedlot wrote:What the heck does this mean?

Lee did not deny his agent Mark Bartlestein before the draft advised Memphis not to trade for him because Lee would never sign a long-term contract with the Grizzlies.

-_-

Someone put commas in so I understand. I need to go back to college. Ugh

I'm no English major, but that sentence looks correct to me.

cucad8 · Post #3 » by **cucad8** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:22 pm

How about this:

Lee did not deny the allegation that before the draft, his agent Mark Bartlestein advised Memphis not to trade for Lee, since Lee would not sign a long term contract with them.

Farm Raid · Post #4 » by **Farm Raid** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:23 pm

The editor needs to be shot.

Post #5 » by **Duffman100** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:35 pm

cucad8 wrote:How about this:

Lee did not deny the allegation that before the draft, his agent Mark Bartlestein advised Memphis not to trade for Lee, since Lee would not sign a long term contract with them.

FTW!

That first sentence is horrid.

cucad8 · Post #6 » by **cucad8** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 8:43 pm

That is a really, really bad sentence. I can't see how that passed by the editor unnoticed. He didn't stop 6 times to read it? Didn't think everyone else would have to?

celticfan42487 · Post #7 » by **celticfan42487** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 9:11 pm

Looks sound enough to me. Only could of put commas around before the draft and maybe change him to Lee.

updated version.

"Lee did not deny his agent Mark Bartlestein, before the draft, advised Memphis not to trade for Lee because Lee would never sign a long-term contract with the Grizzlies."

The only reason the first version of the sentence would end up confusing is if people are not familar with teh agent-client relationship where the agent acts for the client. If that isn't clear someone might think that the agent advised Memphis to not trade for him rather then Lee!

Mr Awesome · Post #8 » by **Mr Awesome** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 9:29 pm

Um no, It's a bad sentence. Not bad enough to misunderstand the meaning, but pretty bad.

cjs55 · Post #9 » by **cjs55** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 9:29 pm

All you need to do is add 'that' after 'deny' and it's much clearer.

It's still a bad sentence.

BballFanAddict · Post #10 » by **BballFanAddict** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 9:52 pm

Speedlot wrote:What the heck does this mean?

Lee did not deny his agent Mark Bartlestein before the draft advised Memphis not to trade for him because Lee would never sign a long-term contract with the Grizzlies.

-_-

Someone put commas in so I understand. I need to go back to college. Ugh

So MANY things wrong with this sentence.

Lee did not deny THAT his agent Mark Bartelstein, before the draft, advised Memphis not to trade for him because HE would never sign a long-term contract with the Grizzlies.

GuyverX · Post #11 » by **GuyverX** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 10:33 pm

The sentence makes it seem like the draft itself advised Memphis. Since the NBA draft is not a living, breathing thing, I find it hard for it to advise anybody on anything. :rofl:

Troubadour · Post #12 » by **Troubadour** » Mon Jul 14, 2008 11:24 pm

Lee did not deny that his agent, Mark Bartlestein, advised Memphis before the draft to not trade for him because Lee would never sign a long-term contract with the Grizzlies.

Jordan23Forever · Post #13 » by **Jordan23Forever** » Tue Jul 15, 2008 12:36 am

cucad8 wrote:How about this:

Lee did not deny the allegation that before the draft, his agent Mark Bartlestein advised Memphis not to trade for Lee, since Lee would not sign a long term contract with them.

A lot better, but you need to add another comma before "before the draft," since it's an aside:

"Lee did not deny the allegation that, before the draft, his agent Mark Bartlestein advised Memphis not to trade for Lee, since Lee would not sign a long term contract with them."

The original sentence is just atrocious, btw. What site/publication printed that? You can rework that sentence in many different ways to mak it read better.

DEEP3CL · Post #14 » by **DEEP3CL** » Tue Jul 15, 2008 6:59 am

All the writer had to do was say, " Lee didn't deny the allegations " the sentence wasn't written clearly.
They ask that type of stuff on police exams. With the way it was written I can see some missing that one if it was on the test.

mankind2706 · Post #15 » by **mankind2706** » Tue Jul 15, 2008 1:30 pm

Some of the people posting in this thread have no right calling out others for poor sentence structure.

Malinhion · Post #16 » by **Malinhion** » Tue Jul 15, 2008 1:58 pm

Wow, that is god awful.

The Main Event · Post #17 » by **The Main Event** » Tue Jul 15, 2008 5:44 pm

mankind2706 wrote:Some of the people posting in this thread have no right calling out others for poor sentence structure.

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