getrichordie wrote:Figured I'd drop this here in case anyone cares to read it. No, I'm not Sam Vecenie or Royce Young, but I did put a lot of effort into this 2800-word preview for the Thunder's upcoming season. Feedback is appreciated. Be honest about what you think. Let me know if I got anything wrong.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BNfmLbtuwAVOOA7LGxOQ0CTBGfLdrxXEvuY8yoGBzJ4/edit?usp=sharing
Throughout your article, I think there were some areas where you wrote a little too much instead of getting to the point. Do you think there's a way to shorten the paragraphs? Shorter phrases could do the trick. Furthermore, I think writing down exactly what your going to talk could help. Oftentimes, you would also jump point to another as if you didn't know what to talk about. Also, I think you could also work on your tone. Often, the tone would change from being serious to being sort of whimsical. I recommend that you try to read posts from other outlets (such as the ringer) to get a sense of how they balance it. All in all, I think you did pretty well considering this was your first post.











